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That Horrible Iron Smile

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The girl I knew before with that horrible iron smile,
With those chrome sets on ivory she wore for a long while;
Everyday at school, as a seat mate I'd taunt
This girl with metal stocks -something she'd never flaunt.


Titanium, Chromium, whatever consisted of these things,
Didn't seem to change how she bothered me through her irate mood swings
She never ran out of ways for her to torment and mess with me
The feeling was mutual; I'd constantly make fun of her as well almost endlessly.


But now, what a woman she is now, and what a woman she is indeed,
With those white sets made of chiclets as she'd smile and as she'd feed;
At some point in her life, I presume, she had never smiled with such grace
Until that day came when she finally ripped those metal braces off of her face.
A poem dedicated to a friend of mine a few years back who used to wear these ridiculously large set of orthodontic braces whenever she goes to school, which was somehow a con since she was really attractive and pretty. I then stumbled upon her facebook account by accident just for the last few months through another old friend of mine, and was I surprised to see photos of her smile without those braces.

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Oh yeah, since I'm passing this to groups:

Is the fluidity given by the poem fluid enough? Are there any grammatical errors in it?

:)
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Mirrorakay's avatar
:lol: It took some patience, but I eventually worked out what this poem was about (before the last stanza, mind you). Personally I thought the poem was relatively smooth though the last line in the second stanza made my mind stumble a bit. The "as well" seems unnecessary to me, but I'm no expert on poetry.
All the same, it was a fun read and I'm glad you shared it with #WriterSecretSanta even if it took me forever to read it :)